A old Wise villager from a small island in the Pacific ocean 100 miles away from japan, wanted to find a different land. The town leader said if he found a new land he could stay at the island, if not he would be hung, but first he had to make a boat. He got wood from around the town and found tires from the beach he put them all together got some food and set sail. He sailed out into the ocean and the whole town cheered. after two days he had sailed 20 miles north east and was heading directly for Russia. but one night a terrible storm was blown towards him, he got caught in the storm and was nearly flipped withen seconds. lightning strikes lit up the sky and thunder rumbled in the back ground, by then he had lost lots of food and was very cold. He was now 95 miles away from Thailand the storm pushed him south very far.he made it to Thailand and he didn't get a warm welcome. he was given some food given a camera so he could take pictures and kick out in 5 minutes. The man made it home to see the mayor ready to throw a snake at him he was just a few feet away from land when the back off his boat was smashed by a shark the man garbed the camera and swam to shore. he showed the man pictures but he wasn't satisfied, he didn't like that there was so much humans, moving things, smoke and houses the man was thrown in a snake pit with fire and the snakes escaped and the island tribe went extinct.
Kia ora Samuel. I really like your story because you added lots of describing words. How long it take you to make the story? Maybe next time you could put paragraphs in your story.
ReplyDeleteHi Leon, next time i'll try add paragraphs, Thanks forr commenting.:)
DeleteHi Samuel
ReplyDeleteI like the quick write because l like the way you describe your writing. But maybe next time you put paragraphs's into your writing.
Hi Samuel
ReplyDeleteI like your story because you thought about what you were going to write then you put what was right. I also like that you did some punctuation in your story but maybe you could add a bit more. But I think your story was good.
Hi Samuel. I really like your quick write that you did. How long did? And did you did you get it of a story or not?
ReplyDeleteHello Samuel, I like your story. It has lots of describing words. You should add some paragraphs. Did you get the picture from pobble 365? It reminds me of a story I did. Great work Samuel :)
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